New Project (Shoma's original)

[Shoma]

Not really looking for any replies, but i would love to hear some comments about it.

OkAY! I'm writing an fanfictional story based on emu1. I just finished the first chapter. This chapter includes, GameCop, Robert, K'dash, Yagami, Superman and your's truely!

Of course the story isnt about a forum but more the forum is real life but of course according the avatar and my immagniaiton i have pretty much painted a picture of how i wanted things to be.

CHeck my blog under 1emu Adventure!

 

So please read it and comment! THANK YOU ALL!

Edited March 22, 2007 by GameCop

[Lucandrake]

So your writing a story about a baseball team?

[Shoma]

......IT's funny; i coulda sworn the first post explained it all....although i could be wrong^^+

BUt if not..how about you read it?

But.....

No Drake, this isnt about a baseball team^^....

 

Better yet a summary would suffice:

I'm using real pple from the 1emu forum and making a whole new plot and storyline:

I will some events and maybe a few obvious whims from this forum but it's supposed to be fantasy-like.

Im trying to have each person's rank go inline with storyline, so just check it now plz.

Edited March 22, 2007 by Shoma

[Private Biscuit]

So your writing a story about a baseball team?

 

You know, after reading that. A story about a baseball team would have sucked less.

[Shoma]

So your writing a story about a baseball team?

 

You know, after reading that. A story about a baseball team would have sucked less.

 

......Oh? Well then, if it sucks then i guess i should end the project. Thanks for the honesty^^.

BUt since it is honesty and not random banter, what flaws did you notice?

Edited March 22, 2007 by Shoma

[Shoma]

NVm! I got the approval i needed! MOre chapters are on the way!

[olaf]

WHAT thE HEll^^ ARE WE^^ tALKIng ABOUT^^;;;;;;!?

[Shoma]

the story on my blog, 1emu adventure...

[Robert]

Since Shoma keeps bugging me for a comment...

 

It's like I've come in at page 53 of a comic strip (cartoon strip, manga) and have no idea of the plot or purpose of it. Makes interesting use of my avatar, lucky I haven't changed it to the standard I'm using everywhere else!

 

Please, PLEASE, run a spellchecker before publishing the next installment.

[Shoma]

Since Shoma keeps bugging me for a comment...

 

It's like I've come in at page 53 of a comic strip (cartoon strip, manga) and have no idea of the plot or purpose of it. Makes interesting use of my avatar, lucky I haven't changed it to the standard I'm using everywhere else!

 

Please, PLEASE, run a spellchecker before publishing the next installment.

OK everyone! CHAPTER 2 released!!!

Robert! YOU sexy Elf!

I took your words as a rising sun that will brighten my story! Of course i wanted confusion to be held in the first chapter but i did leave everyone in pitch black. I was gonna have chapter 2 or 3 explain some things but i chose two. SO here it is, this is where the basic plot/storyline/adventure is explained. I got some killa treats but dont wanna give them too quickly. Enjoy!

Edited March 24, 2007 by Shoma

[Elazul Yagami]

maybe i'd read it.

if i could FIND IT!

[Agozer]

maybe i'd read it.

if i could FIND IT!

Read Shoma's blog.

 

I'm not interested unless I'm mentioned somewhere.

[Robert]

maybe i'd read it.

if i could FIND IT!

http://www.1emulation.com/forums/index.php...p;showentry=186

 

 

I'm kinda finding this a bit hard to follow, and why am I even in this story?

Hopefully others will get some time rather than me.

[GodPigeon]

I Personally cant find it Amusing at all. Rather boring. Its Put together Quite well(I think) But i cant catch on.

[Diso]

It seems to be structured as someone (I guess Magnis) is going to betray Gamecop and the staff members are trying to find out who. I think it's funny that Robert is GC's protector although Robert is actually the leader of the kill Gamecop Guild